Sacred Lands

Sacred Lands

Introduction
I picked up the project yet again in hopes to finish it, though Design has always been a problem, I have a basic idea on how i want the story to go, just hard to fill in the game in between to create a touching, and entertaining story line for the players. That is where I was hoping I could get some input from the community! THis thread however will hold alot of spoilers for the game itself. So bewarned. IF you are interested in helping out, be blunt, and truthful. I make games for you the player so would love to learn the aspects of game writing. Im sorry for my GRammer in most cases im not that great at spelling/English grammer (even though i am american ) Im more of a thinker lol. Now here we GO!

Info
Sacred Lands is a Sci Fi/Fantasy Open World game. IT will have a Fast paced ABS system along with plenty of Quests along the way. Right now I am designing the MAIN Story line from start to finish, then will put in side quests along the way. Working on bringing the Main character (DOX) to live along with showing the relation ship with Seren(Best friend/NOT a love interest) through the depths of hell and back again.

The basic IDEA is Dox awakes years ago without no memory of his past life. Now years later living as a Hired Gun for a city to help prevent the Zombie hordes from killing everyone, he finds himself trying to search for a lost past.

The Sacred Lands
The title the Sacred Lands, represent the many worlds in the universe. Each world has its own energy source, that gives life to the planet, controls the flow of things. If someone was to disrupt each plants "Arc"(which is like a magic based ancient control station) they would throw off the balance to that world.

Factions

Maji:
A group a Magic using warriors, who serve to instill peace across the worlds.

Hajin:
Ex- Maji's mostly who wants to absorb each planets Energy, through the ARC, to rule over all races and worlds.
Basic Story

The wasteland, A place of hardship,greed, mistrust and apathy fighting for scraps these people live there lives in ignorence of an epic stage set before them that would decide there fate as a planet, a hero, a journey a story told many times. the fate of the world rests on your shoulders. The fight will be long, and the people will be merciless, no glory do you have to gain nor fame or fortune, But will you fight?
It is a tale told by many a man, the story of a hero vanquishing evil. good versus evil, But we know the world isent that black and white, the story not so simple the players not so strightforward. a hero yes but for what means? a hero who struggles to remember his past and a brother to bring him closer and a friend by his side. the story is told time and time again but in the end with no clear good or evil who will prevail?

QUICK STORY SPOILER

Basic idea is Dox is forced on the run, with the belief the Hajins are comming to kill him. And has to find out about his past in order to (what he thinks) save the world. But in fact his Brother Aiden has been using him all along, just to absorb the worlds energy. DOx finds out the people chasing them were infact Majis trying to save him, and that Aiden was the reason he couldnt remember anything, Aiden had killed there parents (who were Maji) Because he didnt want to protect the ARC but instead wanted its power. The END GAME, is AIden does infact absorb that worlds power, and takes off leaving Dox behind to die. Dox is rescued and remembering everything sets off to Defeat Aiden before he causes anmore harm *end Game 1*

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Characters:
Name:
Dox Blaine
Info:
Awoken years ago without any memory of his past. Works as a Hired gun, helping hold of the Zombie hordes the randomly invade.

Name:
Seren
Info:
Was rescued by Dox in her early years, and now lives with him. Spends most of her time keeping Dox out of trouble.

Name:
Aiden Blaine
Info:
Dox's Older brother. Not much is know about where he has been for the past several years. But is indeed my strange person
Story Board
WARNING: CONTAINS STORY LINE/SPOILERS

Intro Dox: ~laying his head on the bar with a small cup with whiskey on the rocks~ Random guy: HAHA!!! and then he begs me to spare him Random guy 2: HA! boss sure is brutal no mercy at all! Random guy 3: HEY WAITRESS! come here i got something for ya Waitress: ~walks over cuastiously~ Random guy 3: Grabs her and does things?~ Dox~ quick run up and kicks hand~ Random guy 3: What the fuck?! A fight breaks out between DOx and the strangers, in which ends in dox getting knocked out and recalling a day years in the past when he first woke up in his new life not remembering anything. Dox is just a kid on a transport vessel heading to a distant planet when it was attacked. This story/Tutorial goes over basics of movment and such while Dox tried to escape the vessel. Fast Forward narrator: Space. a vast seemingly endless fronteir and the driving power in the seach for Magic power, a mysterious energy that has driven the human race to expand outward reaching its hands further into the depths of space in search of magic, along with this great new energy came great possiblitys at the turn of the century space had become the new wild west and the people driven to conquer there dreams of wealth, power and fame. Computer: nearing planet bravo alpha 1 L sigma ~flashback sequence no words just video~ Conductor: Hey, kid you awake? Kid: . . . . Conductor: were comeing to the last stop kid you have to get off now Kid: that was nearly 9 years ago, that's one of the last memorys of a previous life a life forgotten to me and to the world, for the last 9 years ive scraped by in this deisessed ravenged land, 9 long years of painful work to pull myself up to this point where i can look at the stars and see them as a goal rather then a dream and i.... Kid: HEY DOX BREAKFEST IS READY Dox: DAMN IT SEREN WOULD YOU STOP YELLING WHILE IM TRYING TO THINK Seren: WELL GET UP ALREADY ~comes up ladder~ we finaly got a job today and you've nearly slept the whole day away dox: a job? whats the pay? Seren: well only about..... 150 bucks dox: 150 BUCKS THATS CRAP Seren: you havent even herd the job yet how do you know? dox: there hardly anything worth doing for that little amount of cash, but for the sake of my boredom whats the job? Seren:exterminator, the contractor wants you to clear his farm of infected dox: gah, i hate infected, couldent you find something better like a job pulling teeth or something? Seren: well for the moment were so in debt we don't have a choice, all ive been keeping us in the black with repair jobs around town at least you can handle this one and make us a little dox: fine, by the way, Seren: ? dox: whats for breakfest? ~end scene~ act 1 scene 2 ~camera pans over a farmhouse in the wilderness as a zombie walk out of the barn~ ~zombie is shot with a sniper shot~ Dox: BOOM! did you see that shot? Seren: ~gag~ please can you tell me before you do things like that? Dox: ha, sorry seren im just getting into this job, its been a while seince ive seen any action Seren: ~offscreen puke~ Dox: maaabbyee you should stay here while i sweep the place alright? Seren: that sounds like a ~blarg~ good idea for once ~player tutorial~ ~end scene~ act 1 scene 3 ~starts after finishing the tutorial portion~ dox: damn what a hellhole ~dox look on the remains of the half eaten body of a women~ dox: tsch, looks like this is the last time a man eats you huh? ~end scene~ act 1 scene 4 ~starts with dox finishing burrying the body a little ways off from the house~ Dox: sigh, this place never ceases to amaze me Stranger: Dox? Dox: And who might you b. . . .~eyes open wide~ ~flashback sequence~ ~scene takes place in a forested area near a large cave enterence standing infront of it is a young Aiden and a young dox Aiden: common dox i dare you Dox: noooo its scary and mom and dad say to stay away from this cave Aiden: fuck sakes dox you have to grow up sometime ~flashback ends~ aiden: its been a while dox dox: Aiden? Aiden: oh so you do remember me, ive been looking for you for some time do you remember the day 9 years ago? dox: nine years. .. . .? ~far off scream~ Dox: SEREN! ~dox runs off as aiden stays there looking over the grave, then runs along with dox~ ~player fight ensues~ Dox: Who are these guys?! Aiden: there hajin, a group looking for the secret of magic dox: magic? Seren: PERHAPS THIS ISENT THE BEST TIME FOR CONVERSATION aiden: shes right lets go dox: / aiden: im driveing. dox:/aiden: . . . . IM DRIVEING dox: ITS MY CAR DAMN IT Seren: WHO CARES LETS GO ~end scene~ act 1 scene 5 ~driveing on a long road leaveing the site seren is asleep in the back and aiden and dox are driveing~ Dox: so... why is this the first time ive seen you in 9 years? aiden: im sorry but even though i knew where you were it was imperitive that i kept your location a secret Dox: nine years is a long time to think your alone in the world aiden: im sorry dox: sorry doesent make up for the time lost sorry doesent bring back years of pain and torture of being alone in the world! aiden: . . . Dox: sigh, im sorry its not your fault, but that doesent explain why your here now after so long, and who are these people following you? aiden: hajin dox:hajin? aiden: there a group seeking controll magic energy and use it to gain a foothold over the intergalatic peace force and there enemys dox:and how does that involve me? Aiden: you seem to have something they need inorder to obtain this controll but we still need to do more research Seren: We should head to newport city then, they have a large library with very old files. . . not to mention some shops. . . OH CRAP DOX WE LEFT OUR MONEY AT THE SHOP Dox: OH CRAP YOUR RIGHT, we need to go back home and pick up some things aiden Aiden: are you crazy? thell be expecting that Dox: doesent matter, we cant fight without guns and we left everything at the shop Seren: not to mention our saveings! what little we have that dox hasent drank up Dox: HEY SHUT IT! just because a man like to have a drink now and then everyone thinks hes an alcoholic Seren: i never said you were an alcoholic Dox: . . . shut up ~end scene~ act 1 scene 6 ~scene takes place outside the shop~ Dox: alright seren don't take long Seren: gotcha, in then out Dox: and try to stay alert Seren: gotcha Dox: oh seren btw can you do something for me? Seren: . . . . ? ~end scene~ act 1 scene 7 ~scene takes place as your leaveing and your ambushed by maji~ Dox: Shit were surrounded Seren: Yea but would you rather have it any other way? Dox: You read my mind, lets go you BASTARDS! ~fight ensues~ ~scene ends~ act 1 scene 7 ~scene starts after the fight ends~ Dox: Heh.... Well... heh there not as tough as they look heh he heeh Stranger: what are you doing? why are you helping THEM?! Dox: who are you and why should i care? Serge: my name is serge im the maji general of this quadrent Dox: maji eh? well i guess that makes us enemys then doesent it? Serge: so your working with the hajin then? so be it prepare to die. Dox: sorry to break it to ya but i don't have the time to fight right now any other time ide love to tango but now ive got to jet ~dox drops a bomb and escapes in the confusion~ Serge: ~after gaining his composure~ Dox eh? something tells me this isent the last time youll cause me problems Seren: DOX! your bleeding! you've been shot! Dox: im fully aware of that. but for the moment we need to get out of here as fast as we can Aiden: but thell follow us wont they? Dox heh seren did you set it? Seren: yes but im going to miss it aiden: . . . ? ~explosion~ ~scene end~ act 1 scene 8 Dox: Alright seren were are we going now? Seren: i don't know we should get as far away as possible sooo we should probly head to newport Dox: why? Seren: well for one they have the most extensive archives on the planet and you shoulde beable to find some information about your past Dox: good point... Seren: seconnd we can take the ship to ~island place~ and try to skip out on these pepole Aiden: im not sure if that's possible the hajin are many in number and are spred out over many planets in this system Seren: that may be but even with all there people they cant searh the whole planet. .. can they? well either way our first stop on the way to new port is ummm this town Dox: what do you mean "this town"? seren: well its on the map but it doesent have a name Dox: doesent matter looks like were over heating anyway act 2 scene 1 ~scene takes place in a deserted village midway between first town and middle of desert town~ Dox: DAMN this piece of shit car ~kick~ ~car starts to smoke~ Gah! Seren: well we should use this time to gather some pervisions seeing as someone forgot to grab enough food ~angry face~ Dox: What?! how could i leave behind my amazing rlx-23 elemental blaster orr this rocket launcher Seren: YOU DONT EVEN HAVE AMMO FOR ANY OF THIS STUFF!! Dox: . . . and? Seren:. . . YOUR STUPID, im going to go look around for a store to get us some food you stay here and FIX THE CAR Dox: o... ok aiden: looks like the fuel line is leaking and your engine is over heated anndd also your out of gas Dox:. . .well we might as well search around for some stuff go look that was while i look over in these buildings aiden: alright yell if you find anything ~end scene~ act 2 scene 2 ~scene takes place in an abandonded building on the outskirts of town dox walks in and sees an infected eating a corpse~ Dox: ugh. ~raises his gun to shoot~ wolfcreature: STOP DONT SHOOT ~knocks gun from hand~ Dox: Grr who are you? are you hajin? Lupin: nams lupin. and hajin? No but You must leave here NOW Dox: lisen buddy ide love to leave but.. Lupin: THERES NO TIME FOR THIS LEAVE!!! ~fight ensues dox losses but is unharmed upon wakeing up the infected and body are gone and his curiosity is peaked~ Dox: that was weird. . .wonder what the story with this town is Aiden/Seren: DOX!? WEHRE ARE YOU?! Dox: STOP YELLING DAMN IT im in here and im fine Seren: Dox your hurt! who did this to you!? Dox: don't know exactly, he looked like a half man half wolf seren: ~hits dox~ STOP GETTING DRUNK WHEN WE NED YOU Dox: OW DAMN IT IM SERIOUS Aiden: look here theres blood and it looks theres been a struggle, Dox: yea there was an infected but i guess the lupin or whatever guy took it out ~stands up and walks toward aiden~ Seren: guys ive found something interesting, looks like its an activation switch, should i hit it? Dox: might as well couldent hurt ~seren presses button and a hidden staircase opens below the floor~ Dox: im curious, that lupin guy was strong. cant leave here without wining a fight against him. Seren: sigh. ~scene ends~ ~audio log on a computer on the way to the quest spot~ Day 34 our research on the infected has been very prosperous so far the villagers above have been very good subjects for testing . . . . .~static~ . . . Lupin who has been very helpful in finding test subjects for us ~end~ act 2 scene 3 ~scene takes place in an abandoned research lab/underground facility the place reeks of decay and infected are abundent after a bit of exploration the group meet up with a hurt lupin~ Lupin: Why.. Why are you here?!? Get out NOW while you still have your lives! Dox: Noway! tell us what this place is and what your doing here now! Lupin: the less you know. the better Aiden: Damn it what have you done to these people! Seren: that's right what is wrong with you! Lupin: RAWR, Ide rather not explain this to you ide rather you just LEAVE! ~punches wall and sudden rumbleing leading to a cave in blocking the main route lupin went in~ Dox: Damn him Aiden: Dont worry well find him and Get to the bottom of this Seren: Why would he do this... Dox: thinking~ ~scene end~ ~audio log 2~ Day 122 today our research has come to a very very concerning point, our cures for the infected that seemed to disapate the virus only mutated it the infected we have created have become stronger faster and smarter then ever before strength and speed surpaseing even humans in some cases intellegence is still far below human capacity but the mutations are continueing . . .~static~ . . . ~end~ act 2 scene 4 ~takes place in a large room with lupin fighting off But not killing! infected ~ Dox: there he is! Lupin: Damn... Not now! Seren: WHAT DID YOU DO TO THESE PEOPLE what do you have to gain from any of this!? Lupin: This wasent my intention. I only intend to redeam myself by fixing my misdeeds. now leave here before what has befallen these people will befall you Dox: i WONT TAKE YOUR THREATS LAYING DOWN! ~jumps from ledges into the arena~ ~starts shooting infected~ I WONT LET THESE PEOPLE BE YOUR TEST SUBJECTS ANY LONGER! Lupin: NO YOU DONT UNDERSTAND! STOP! ~lupin charges dox in a rage~ Dox: Bring it on. Fight scene~ you can win this one -.^~ Lupin: Breathing heavy~ You know not what you do! Dox: Yea well fuck you! at least im not an evil asshole Lupin: YOU IDIOT THINGS AREN THAT SIMPLE LIFE IS NEVER THAT SIMPLE! Dox:. . . Lupin: i don't have time for this. i need to find her. Seren: . . . ~lupin exits via door and breaks the keypad when he leaves but leaves a trail of blood~ ~end scene~ Audio file: Day 140 The experiments... have gone awry....the research is ruined the infected destoryed most everything. what we could salvage in information wasent nearly enough to continue the research. This is the last record for hajin project parasite project manager ~static~ act 2 scene 5 Dox: Those bastard hajin. HOW COULD THEY DO THAT TO THESE PEOPLE! Seren: They they had no idea.. and lupin... he helped them why? Aiden: i fear there is more to this then we know we should find lupin and get more answers from him Dox: Damn right were going to find him. and when i find him im going to turn that wolf hide in to a PELT ~end scene~ act2 scene 6 ~scene takes place in a small coridoor where lupin is siting in critical condition atempting to treat his wounds Dox: You BASTARD! your own people You sold out your own people ~puts gun to his head~ Im going to ask you 3 questions and your going to answer them. Lupin: ~breathing heavy~ . . . . Dox: Why did you do this to these people? Lupin: The story isent that simple. this was not my intention Dox: IT WASENT YOUR INTENTION BUT THIS IS THE RESULT, THE TORTURE THESE PEOPLE WENT THROUGH IS ON YOUR HANDS Lupin: Breathing heavy~ The hajin... they came and told us they had a cure for the parasite a way to rid us of the infected once and for all Dox:And you belived them!? Lupin: when faced with destruction you would trust anyone to help your family, my family my friends slowly one by one the infection took them we needed to find a cure we dident have the luxary of having morals! seren: SO YOU USED INNOCENT PEOPLE! Lupin: im not proud of what ive done. but i did it for my family Dox: . . . . . . Why do you look like this? half wolf man what the hell did you do to yourself? Lupin: We needed a living test subject for our syerum, i subjected myself and this was the result, sliceing my dna with the dna of a Wolf an animal immuned to the parasite i maedged to make myself immune but ive also lost some of my humanity Dox: . . .. . Whats behind this door? Lupin: my last remnents of human life? the only thing keeping my mind bound to this world? no its my one last faluire as a human being keeping me here. Dox: . . . I should kill you. But in the same situation i would have probly done the same. although i cant say your actions were admerable you deserve a chance to redeem yourself Lupin: its.... its my grandaughter... Dox:?! Lupin: I had no idea this was happening if i had know about this i would have stoped it long before but she was somehow immune to the parasite so the scientists.... they took her and told me she would be placed in protective custody but they dident. the bastards took her! and experiemented on her! Seren: !? aiden: What was there goal in all of this?! Lupin: im not sure but they somehow made the infection stronger and the parasite iteself steals the very life energy of the person and not only that ffrom the air and the living plants and animals it steals there life energy and stores it very inefectivly i can only guess what they wanted Aiden: .. . . Dox: were going through this door together lupin, whatever you've done in the past well make up for it whatevers on the other side of this door well face together Lupin: Thank you... myfriend ~end scene~ act 2 scene 7 Lupin: lucia! what have they done to you!! Dox: >:/ ggrrrrr Seren: oh my god ~looks away Aiden: seren are you ok? perhaps we should leave the room for now Dox: yea aiden you take seren and wait for us outside lupin and i can handle this on our own ~lupin looks on in shock~ Lupin: No..... NOOOOOOOOO!!!!! Dox: . . . Shes... shes gone... life support says shes gone Lupin: NO!! THERES STILL A WAY THERE HAS TO BE A WAY!!! Dox: LUPIN SHES GONE! theres nothing left for us to do now. the infection has taken her brain Lupin: NO I WONT ACCEPT THIS I WILL BRING HER BACK! ~lupin starts smashing machines inorder to free her~ Dox: LUPIN STOP! Lupin: ive studied qi qoung for nearly 50 years of my life i was considered a master in my time! there has to be a way to bring her back! Lisen! she still breaths her heart still beats! her brain can be revived! we just need to get her into a cryo chamber! Dox: But then what?! shell just sit here! Lupin: NO! ill devote everything i have to findign a way to cure her Dox: Lupin... ~computer~ Intruder detected activateing infected defense array Lupin: Shit! we need to get lucia out of here! infected lucia: There will be no need to remove me from my apparatus. Lupin: lucia? ho... how? infected Lucia: the being you know as lucia is nomore her memories have been removed inorder to create this biological system Lupin: She.... she really is no more then.... Dox: lupin.... im sorry Lupin: NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ~lupin rage fight ensues lupin in full animal rage mode~ ~end scene~

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That is pretty much all i got done so far so let me know what you think would improve the story line, maybe the relationship between characters... anything really. Not quite sure where to go one from here lol

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MMO Genre

Question of the Century. I have two Major ideas but i can only follow one path, so would love to get some input.

Lets get some Pros and Cons of MMORPG Themes

Fantasy
Pros
Wide varity of spells/classes
Open Story Line good for Expansions

Cons
Most MMO are based on
Same basic style of "Classes"

Post Apocalyptic
Pros
Not that many out there
Varity of Monsters
Different Style of "Class"
Cons
Closed story line (Bounderies)

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Neo-Pac Template

When the great minds of Unrivaledneo and Timpac get together, a great template is born. Ok maybe not THAT great but it has been the building block of the Sacred Lands Heros and Enemys. They may not Look like much but with the right artist can turn into some beautiful char-sets.

I present to you the Neo-Pac Template!

Female

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Sacred Lands

Since Wolfie keeps saying Im never here on the forums, decided to post my WIP design doc, if alot of this dont make sence im sorry, just chichen scratch for me mostly but im always open to ideas and suggestions.



Battle System:
A Side Battle System similar to popular Final Fantasy and Crono Triger Games.
Instead of the Command Bar that shows up for players turn, there will be a Ring Menu that goes around the whom ever player turn it is, Able to Choose Attack, Defend, Magic Skill, Guardian, Item, or what ever commands that player has.

Guardian System, similar to a Limitbreak system, the Player gains points into this bar and when filled able to summon there inner clone of there guardian they are “combined” with. The Guadian Clone itself start of small but over time and use they lvl up and grow becoming more and more powerful with the user.

The Battle itself will be Very Animated, Different Poses for different skills. Skill effects such as Jump, Throw Friend, Player Co-Op attacks, where able to designate what player attack and at what time, able to have all 4 players attack eith all at once or in a pattern depending on the skill

Seeing how The enemys will be on the map so you are able to pick yours fight, Element of surprise is always the best, being able to sneak up on you enemy and get a pre attack always helps the flow of battle. Depending on if you get attack from behind or straight on depends on the formation of you party, Maybe even is a mob jumps in the middle of the group, could have him corner, or visa versa.

All Players and some Enemys will have a auto chance to parry an melee attack.

Menu System:

Skill System:
Skills will be learned Via Blah(Don’t know yet) Skills have there own EXP bar, the ability to level up and sometime evole into a new and improve spell. EX: Once Fire1 reaches lvl 20 it will either create or Spawn Fire 2(Group Spell)

New Game/Save/Load/Credits System:
When you first open up the game, you will be shows a Tome with etched Writing Spelling out Sacred Lands. You will be Prompt a Mini Menu. New Game/Continue/End Game and Credits.

New Game- When you choose this option the Book will Open to start the Intro we Have written up, It will ade in text on one page and a picture on the other until it goes through the whole intro.

Continue- Choosing this option, the Book will Open again to show a Save Slection window on one page, highlighting a Saved Game will show you Data on the other page, Map Name, chatacters in Party, Gold, Levels and other stuff.

End Game- The Book Will center itself and fade out. Closing the game

Credits- Will Open the book fading in and Out the list of credits.

Misc Systems

Adventure System/Tool:
Outta combat the player will be able use tools to help move around dungeons, Let it be a sword to cut down bushes, arrows to stun enemys/or hit switches. Let alone a Run/Jump system to cross big gaps, jump from cliff to cliff, Or to just move around the world advoiding enemys.
A hud will be shown to show what tool is currently equipped then using the Q,E keys you can switch back n forth, and the W key uses the Tool.
For Running and Jumping, Two keys will be used to control both.

Quest Log:
Quest Log is cut down into sections.
Quest Name: What quest you are currently on.
Objective: What you gotta donext , let it be one task or many.
Then a sorta Guide or Ref on what you have done, or been. Important Notes, names, etc.

Lupen Day/Night w/NPC Support:
A dynamic Day night system with Roating light effect, switch to Stop/Start Shadows/Light, To pause/Unpause the time, and to also Set time, will bring the world into life. NPC Support so that only certain time of the day will certain NPCS spawn to support this.

Cursed with the Spirit of a Wolf Lupen transform every night to a wolf, changing the way he fights from an Ranger/Archer to a Ranger/Brawler, still able to use his magic in both forms of course. He is also able to transform at will but only when enraged or in trouble.